1. | Jun 28, 2014

What a good job you were there to look after her and call an ambulance! I liked your use of sound etcfefs, and you used the ellipsis ( ) really well to build up suspense. I also really liked the use of the word spun' a really powerful verb to show how quickly you turned.Have a look again at this sentence now: I put one of my long hands onto the door when suddenly… Can you think of a better adjective for your hand than long'?